Dominion69
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The following is a short fantasy prose peice I put togethr with an attept at a humorous plot twist. Please give me feedback on the good and bad points of the work.
Waterfalls
While on a hiking trip into the mountains of central Washington, I happened upon this small, but beautiful, cascading waterfall. The sound of the water flowing over the terrain was enticing, erotic and soothing. As I approached, I noticed I was not alone in this tranquil setting. There, under the water, was a beautiful young lady enjoying all the sensual pleasure the water could provide to her delicate body.
She was angelic. Her soft, lightly tanned skin gleamed as the suns rays kissed at her wet skin. Her long, flowing hair melted into the cascading water as if the waterfall itself had consumed her and became one with her. Her eyes gleamed with passion and her body was molded for desire. As I tried to make my escape, she noticed me. I became lifeless and consumed with her beauty.
I was lost in a whirlwind of confusion and desire. In an instant the world stopped and time stood still. Raising her right hand with a soft and gentle motion she beckoned my presence. As I approached, her radiance captivated and hypnotized me. I was under her control and nothing I could do would change it, nor did I want to. She pulled me close and kissed me, softly, gently, and ever so passionately. My hormones began to rage and my heart pounded faster and faster with every touch. I could feel the passion, desire and need to touch her. I could feel the need to caress her and love her swelling up in my soul, my heart and my limbs.
I began to caress her body in slow, gentle passes. Each touch was swelling our desire for each other to new levels. I pulled her close and her soft wet skin felt like the finest silk. I kissed her neck gently. She began to enjoy my touch as much as I hers. Together we shared in the sensuality of the moment. Each of us touching, caressing, and feeling the other as if we were as one in mind and body. Every want and thought from me was met with her action and reaction. Every touch was a new level of sensuality.
As the passion escalated, she took me with her hand and guided me to a place of such warmth and ecstasy. I drove deep between her thighs; pushing and thrusting, feeding off of her reactions; trying to take her to a level of pleasure like no other. She was pulsating with desire for me and me for her. We were moving, holding, caressing and feeling each other as if there was no other place; no other world. It was just the two of us lost in a world of extreme gratification and pleasure. It was heaven.
We continued, lost in the moment, each absorbing every ounce of pleasure the other could provide. Finally we reached the crescendo of our pleasure and could take no more. The intensity of the moment shattered. The reality of the scene set in. The hot water heater ran cold and I am taking a shower alone.
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