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Ladybug19 -> the first time / home (7/6/2004 1:50:38 PM)
The moment i stepped into your home i wished to call it my own the first time i sat at your feet I felt at peace the first time you let me look you in the eyes i floated through the clouds the first time i slept on the floor close to you i slipped into sweet ablivion the first time i was punished by your strict hand i felt forgiven the first time i sat behind you while riding the streets i felt free the first time you brought me back to where i live i felt torn and now i wait anxiously for our next meeting i wait to come home Slave Dee

dearydear -> RE: the first time / home (7/7/2004 5:35:36 PM)
you seem to write very poorly hun why do you take up the space [:D]

lookingwithin04 -> RE: the first time / home (7/10/2004 3:32:27 PM)
well ladybug, i actually found your poem to bring back memories of my own, for me i read a poem and try to place it somewhere in my life, and i was able to do that with this poem, as for deary's post, i found that sad, we should be complimenting each other, not criticizing each other for our writings. Once again thank you for a great work of art.

Ladybug19 -> RE: the first time / home (7/11/2004 1:43:56 PM)
thank you so much lookingwithin Slave Dee

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