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MISTRESS NOIR GLACE - 2/22/2004 4:49:27 PM   
NoirGlace


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Well in the south side of Kansas City
In the calmer part of town
There's a Mistress who reigns there
And subbies you'd best beware
If Mistress Noir ever hunts you down

She is Big Bold and Beautiful
And She wears her power well
She can give you heaven if
You serve her proper
But if you don't She'll bring you hell

Call her Ma'am, Mistress, or Highness
Call her Lady, call her Queen
Call her wrong, or in the manner
Of the disrespectful
And Domina Bitch will reign supreme.

She goes by many titles
Each one meant to show her call
Mistress Didi, Noir Glace, and
Even Madam Betenoir
No matter the calling, She claims them all.

You'll instantly know her for the Lady
And will know her as the woman too,
One which will not quietly stand
For a useless untrained man
But delights rightly in the instruction of a few.

Strength and discipline are her weapons
Domination is the crown she wears
She rules by her own
Superior authority
Intimidating contemplation is strict yet fair.

Dominating partner she will always be
Strong woman of feminine mastery
Elevated and with decidedly
Coldly applied instruction
And the will to set the submissive soul free

She is…Matriarch to the manor born.
And she rules, oh yes she rules.
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RE: MISTRESS NOIR GLACE - 3/7/2004 6:09:22 AM   
iwillserveu


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Not your best. The rhyme scheme varies and seems to exist only because you feel it should. The whole thing seems forced. (I know it suffers by comparison, but it pales next to the comfy recliner poem.)

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When the Lady smiles i can't resist her call. As a matter of fact, i don't resist at all. Well that depends if it is a smile or a grimmace.

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