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MY COMFY RECLINER - 2/22/2004 4:59:08 PM   
NoirGlace


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Quite recently I acquired a new recliner
The acquisition was amde mutually.
I needed one, which would provide comfort,
And had looked over several diligently.
Found one which lacked the proper fit.
Hard and dry, too rough on the sit.
It brought me no relief and made me sore.
And its back's construction was quite poor.
Broad based and too lax was another.
Broken in by a past owner who did not wish to smother.
Well one, while very good at bearing my weight,
Took it upon itself to "master its bait".
And just as I'd given up, well he found Her.
Into my life reposed this well-made lounger.
It proved to be quite an apt adjustable seat.
And even had an area where I could prop my feet.
This chair has arms, though they're bound and tied.
This chair has legs, though splayed and spread wide.
The seat is lined in supplication, beseeching eyes, and avid tongue
Bears my weight quite nicely, no matter how long I stay on.
And if I'ver imbibed too much drink. behold its great asset.
I can go where I am presently perched, and it never gets wet.
So, I've discarded all the others, for what need could they be.
This one provides me a place to sit, then adjusts, and pleasures me.


< Message edited by NoirGlace -- 2/27/2004 3:21:47 PM >
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RE: MY COMFY RECLINER - 3/7/2004 5:59:27 AM   
iwillserveu


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I liked this one. Longer lines mean the rhymes don't jar. The rhyme scheme helps somewhat. (I'm not sure what it is since sometimes a and c are the same.)

I noticed no feminine rhymes. Oddly this is good. If you want to emphasize a point it would be useful and an extra emphasis would detract from your recliner metaphor.

Yes, this is a compliment.

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