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One author begs the readers - 3/3/2004 4:06:26 PM

iwillserveu

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Does anybody ever read these? I'm begging for comments. Does it suck? Is it OK? What do you think OF THE FICTIONAL CHARACTER? (Yeah, I have had people assume it is me if it is the first person.) Is what I describe impossible?

Please, Please, Please, may i have some, or any, comment?

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RE: One author begs the readers - 3/3/2004 6:20:08 PM

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Actually most who have posted in this section have asked for feedback. I know I have responded off list to two of the people. There is one person who posted the first part of a story and asked if anyone would be interested in the second part.

I know personally I am not a big poetry fan (my own included), and so I don't read much of that this is posted here. I am glad to know your stories are not true as ones like the stairmaster one are scary. I realize there are dangers in all practices of bdsm, but to secure someone to a stairmaster then leave them alone is scary. Then they get tired it would be all too easy for them to slip when they got tired and literally kill themselves from the way they are secured (from my mental picture of them).

I also have pet peeves about pronouns capitalized when they shouldn't be and not capitalized when they should (i).

As far as fantasy's go, yours seem good, and should be something that mistress would find appealing, but I quit reading after the first few as submissive men don't do anything for me. That is, unless I am playing with them and then it's all mental as I never let a male sub cum. But I haven't topped in years.

I don't judge my own stories (now on pages 3&4), but the one I liked the most was Wild Pony's story. I thought I wrote her offsite to ask her if it is the way she and her Master got together, but either I forgot to or she didn't respond.

BTW though, I will mention that I did respond to several of the others that have posted (albeit offsite), but I don't remember you responding to others about their writing. Well, unless you count telling the one person putting a copyright sign was the same as putting your furniture in the front yard. If you responded to others it could make others more willing to respond to you.

Sandy

::grumbles as I come back to edit:: I hate when a typo actually does a word so that spell check misses it.

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RE: One author begs the readers - 3/4/2004 6:40:37 PM

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Sandy,

I read part of one of yours. Although female submission it self does nothing for me I do appreciate sex.

Unfortunately, I was in a chastity device and erections hurt.

Thanks for the feedback. It is appreciated. BTW, you are the first to respond to that first chapter.

It wasn't BDSM, per se, but it could never get really published. (This month in the Catholic Reader...

)

I write much about scenes going wrong that seem to me to be like nightmares. (Good nightmares, but night mares.

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RE: One author begs the readers - 3/8/2004 3:55:08 PM

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I'm a creative writing graduate student. I'll be happy to give you some comments if you would like to email your stuff to me. My email is:

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RE: One author begs the readers - 3/11/2004 5:22:21 PM

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If anyone is following this, I contacted her. She has agreed to review 1) "Alice the FemDom has Pizza" (1,050 words)

2) Vanilla (OK, Fudge Ripple) (808 words)

3) Chess Player (1,706 words)

After I sent her the zillion or so porno stories I wrote.:)

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