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Consider me.... - 4/10/2010 7:35:10 AM   
xXone4kneelingXx


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Give yourself unto Me,
for in the future I can see.

you before Me bowing down,
and on your face is no frown.

I will lead you, keep you near.
for in My arms you have no fear.

I will soothe you thru the years,
as I wipe away your tears.

in My hands I'll gently guide you,
forever standing right beside you.

you are clay then I add water,
to make you whole, I am the potter.

of all the things I want to see,
is you down on bended knee.

It is coming, you feel it too,
as you wonder "what do i do?"

you step foward, then go step back,
now I'm wondering "Are you off track?"

I know your head, I know your heart,
but now I ponder "will W/we part?"

you restore My faith in thee,
as you ask "how can this be"

that i am Yours and You are mine,
to be together for all time.

I lay your head upon My knee,
I pet you gently so you can see.

that I am here and I am real,
and I know just how you feel.

As you look up with love and praise,
I know it's more than just a phase.

you are ready to be complete,
as you kneel before My feet.

when at last you speak those words,
that are the sweetest that I've heard.

"i am Yours, Sir, can You see,
i want You to consider me?"


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RE: Consider me.... - 4/10/2010 8:59:28 PM   
sweetboundesire


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if you rhyme less he may consider you more...

not bad...but i dislike poems that have the feel of having to rhyme.

be free...care less for what rhymes and more what comes thru true.

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and every broken line seems to have a particular design~
and the universe can only expand.
gotta pocket full of dreams and cash in my hand.
and i know, money ain't real...

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RE: Consider me.... - 4/10/2010 9:08:24 PM   
bluefireeyez


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It is cute, but does feel a little forced here and there.

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