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ElanSubdued -> RE: Would love to do Your homework Mistress (8/12/2011 6:49:18 PM)
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Chris,
Your approach is original and a pleasant departure from some of the threads we get here. However, there are a number of things marring your uniqueness and I'm guessing these contribute to the (generally) negative feedback you're getting. Also, there is a "too good to be true" element to your offer. I'll discuss the first issue and leave the "too good to be true" debate for others. Here are the things that came to mind as I was reading:
1.) You started your post with "chris". This is a proper name and thus should be capitalized. University profs don't usually make allowances for BDSM protocols.
2.) Your handle ("yourhomeworkslav") is missing a letter and thus the spelling is incorrect. I realize the cause may be a limitation in the number of letters allowed by the Collar Me software. Still, this is something you should take into account and work around. Also, handles embedded with the name of your primary fetish (or any fetish) make a bad impression.
3.) I went to read your profile. Your OP is an exact copy-and-paste of the body copy from your profile. This looks lazy and violates Collar Me's terms of service. What you've written, despite good intent, is a personal ad. This belongs in your profile and not in the Ask A Mistress forum. If you want to start a discussion about essay writing as a service, I encourage you to do so, but a straight-up, copy-and-paste effort isn't cool.
4.) Given what you're offering, demonstrating near-perfect grammar would help your cause. There are a number of obvious mistakes (the contraction "you're" instead of the personal pronoun "your", incorrect and/or inconsistent uses of punctuation, unbalanced lists, missing possessives, and so forth) in your OP.
5.) Calling names (such as "the fat bald guy with body odor at Target") isn't graceful and doesn't make a good impression.
6.) The phrase "I only desire to be a slave to those that I find attractive" outs you, which is okay, but let's be clear about something. You wish to serve in a quid pro quo fashion and in a fashion where everyone involved gets their needs met. From your side, part of this means you must find the woman (or women) you're serving sexually attractive. There's nothing wrong with this, however, sugarcoating your motives with altruism is something the folks around here flag in an instant.
7.) You've missed a critical issue when writing "what's the catch; simply put, no catch". The catch is you're attempting to insert yourself as a conduit for women who have invested time, money, and intelligence in pursuing a course, certificate, degree, or what-have-you. If you don't deliver or provide something unsatisfactory, you've just blown all these women have invested.
It behoves you (yes, I'm using British spelling, not American) to consider three things: (1) you're asking these woman to cheat, (2) you're asking these woman to lose the opportunity of learning, and (3), whether intended or not, you're insulting the intelligence of these women. I've been in the situation where required courses not related to my area of study occupied a great amount of time. With work, school, and a somewhat minimal social life (due to work and school), I often wished there was a way to make extra courses go away. But, that's part of higher learning. Managing this is an essential part of the experience and of managing life. (Alright, yes, you can make an argument that one approach to "managing" is invoking your services.) At any rate, though your offer may be entirely legitimate, kindhearted, and made with a win-win spirit, ostensibly the issues I'm addressing in this paragraph are where you'll encounter greatest resistance.
Welcome to the forums, mate, :-)
Elan.
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