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DBWhiskey -> RE: Is there something I'm missing or doing wrong ?? (1/25/2012 6:11:01 PM)

You are 100 times more interesting now. I think the (preferably house trained) joke is good stuff, putting the 'lol' afterwards weakens it. Seriously, much better overall.

I especially like the part where you showcase your self-awareness and give us some reflection, talking about your childhood. I also like your talk about your trade and owning your own business and all that, you are seriously more attractive now.

So now, think mating birds. You got to get out there and show your feathers, eventually some female will like them.



LadyHibiscus -> RE: Is there something I'm missing or doing wrong ?? (1/26/2012 9:41:16 AM)

You continue to bring the funny, DBW. Are you secretly a chick? Because I would totally become a lesbian for you.



kalikshama -> RE: Is there something I'm missing or doing wrong ?? (1/26/2012 3:16:53 PM)

Pretty good!

To avoid confusion, I recommend changing:

My girl (pet) likes to be

to

My ideal girl (pet) likes to be

If you send me a sample first email, I will be happy to critique it. You can use my profile for the demo. For testing purposes ignore the "not looking" portion and pretend I'm closer to your age.



BaroqueDom -> RE: Is there something I'm missing or doing wrong ?? (6/12/2012 9:39:00 AM)

I don't suppose someone could look over my profile as well? I'm curious as to how it could be improved.



Deliena -> RE: Is there something I'm missing or doing wrong ?? (6/13/2012 11:09:17 AM)

OK first glance = not bad hon. I'd put a bit in about what your ideal partner would be like so that you are also letting the ladies you contact or who contact you know whether it's likely to be a total waste of time or if there's a match up in ideals there.

Spelling and stuff is fine, list of likes and dislikes is good. Personally I see "Friends only" and "actively seeking" as mutually exclusive but the world's full of different people. I love the last couple of lines, warm and welcoming, nice touch.

Hope that helps a little. Feel free to have a perv at my profile and stuff to see if there's any ideas you can riff off of there



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