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The first time... - 10/7/2012 6:46:07 AM   
topazladys


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We meet for dinner, a nice restaurant civilised conversation. We talk more about who we are, how our lives unfold. Discover connections to books, music, travel and more. Funny stories shared and enjoyed.

As we talk, I’m searching your face, your eyes, and your mouth for clues. Does he want me, is he attracted to me. I look at his hands wondering, will they touch me softly, gently, teasing or roughly, demanding. Can I articulate this? Is this what you want?

Dinner reaches it’s close and we prepare to leave the restaurant, you hold my hand sending electricity pulsing though my nerves, each pulse centering on my clit. As we reach the car park you lead me to my car and lean in close. You kiss me gently, just holding my hand no more, not pushing not demanding, a slow deep kiss. You pull away and a whimper escapes me, I want more. Your hand gently caresses my bottom as you pull me closer, I can feel the heat from your body through my clothes, the scent of your aftershave makes me weak at the knees as a lean against you.

“So is this how it ends shygirl? Is this where you would like the night to end?” I look into your eyes, indecision rages in my brain, should I? shouldn’t I? Can you see the storm of conflicted desire raging in my soul?

I want you, I want to stand naked in front of you. Your eyes exploring my body, your hands exploring my arms, legs, breasts, those secret private places, my head bowed, shaking, defenceless in front of you, my juices slowly trickling down my legs.

“shygirl”, the sound of your voice makes me jump as you lean closer and you whisper into my ear. “So what is it to be shygirl? Do you put yourself in my hands? Can you take that first step to becoming what you truly are. Can you begin that journey you yearn for? Are you ready to leave the fantasy behind”.

“TURNAROUND” the change in tone sends a pulse of fear through my veins, my pussy throbs in response. “Put your hands on the car.” I turn following your instructions, knees shaking, heart pounding, breathing heavily as I try to retain control of my body.
Standing close behind me you undo the button on my trousers and release the zip with one hand whilst the other reached up my shirt, cruelly pinching a nipple as I gasp and lean backwards towards you to feel your body next to mine. “Why do you fight so hard to deny what you want, what you need?” I breathe deeply, open my mouth to speak, but as your hand slides down my panties and explores my wet quivering cleft, I can’t help but gasp.

“Don’t speak” your hands withdrawing a last cruel pinch of my nipple and a soft tender caress of my clit. “You ARE going to follow me shygirl, you are going to follow me back to my hotel. My key is in your pocket. You will have 5 minutes to prepare yourself for me. You will stand with your back to the door, when I walk into the room your shirt and your trousers will be neatly folded on the desk in front of you. Do you understand?” I nod slowly, turning around and looking in to your eyes.

I want to trust. I want you to be the man I hope you are. I want you to be the seeker, looking for something real. I want you to be that combination of friend, lover, soul mate, teacher, guide and more. I want to be able to give you what you want and need. I want to be your friend, lover, soul mate, teacher, guide and more.

I fear you are another wanabe, asshat, predator. I fear that the conversations we have had, the intimacies we have shared are lies and words designed to strip my defences. Convenient words to get you laid. Fear can drive us forward, or hold us back. Fear can be harnessed to climb mountains and achieve seemingly impossible goals. Fear can make us deny who we are, hiding away in the shadows watching the world pass us by.

I’m standing on the edge of that precipice, ready to take that fateful step. Will you be there to catch me? After the night is over and in the cold light of the following dawn, tired, body bruised and aching, will you turn to me hold me close? Or will simply walk away, satisfied that you have shot your load, smiling as you reach for your phone or laptop looking for another fool.
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RE: The first time... - 10/7/2012 8:17:29 AM   
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Beautifully written, and oh so true...

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RE: The first time... - 10/7/2012 8:31:08 AM   
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Good work. Tension is developed artfully so reader and narrator feel it together; I was eager to get to the moment of submission and glad to see that it was withheld.

Fear is central to D/s, never more so than in a first encounter. topazladys, you chose well in addressing doubt in detail while stopping short of resolution.

Please take no offense, but I see where you might improve on language. I am a career writer and editor whose work is reviewable in this forum. If you're curious, check it out. Then let me know if you'd be interested in having me apply a light coat of polish to this little gem of a story.

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RE: The first time... - 2/20/2013 1:32:19 AM   
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So I'm not alone, lol. I've pictured a similar situation and wondered the same thing.

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RE: The first time... - 3/15/2013 10:26:12 AM   
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god I have that same issue everytime. glad to know I am not alone.

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RE: The first time... - 5/9/2013 6:41:18 PM   
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This story really kept me hooked from the first line till the end. Not to mention I really felt a connection with both the Master and the submissive. I am so much like that shygirl. It was an easy story to relate too and I thought wonderfully written.


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RE: The first time... - 5/9/2013 8:09:47 PM   
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very nice :)

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RE: The first time... - 7/20/2013 7:44:37 PM   
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Thank you for your comments. Possibly more to come,

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