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First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new guys :P - 1/14/2013 4:59:47 PM   
namelessphill


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You are at a club, dancing with someone. he puts his hands round your waist, standing behind you. Nothing new there, he slides his hands up and down your sides as he gently pulls you into him, it’s just slightly dirty dancing. You start to take real notice when he tightens his grip slightly, still not forcefull, but hard enough that you feel his cock through his trousers. it’s something you often feel when dancing dirty, but this is different, he’s gentle, but direct, he holds you there tracing his hands round your hip bones, your trousers are low, your top a belly top, his fingers are just ever so slightly cold, running through the grove from the top of your hip to the rim of your trousers.

You know his hands are only a few centimeters from being inside your underwear, but still so far. you realize you’ve stopped dancing and promptly continue. Pressing you harder into him; he hardens, you feel it, and even though nobody could see in the dark of the club, you bite your lip and close your eyes. His left hand moves up and round your front, palm to the bare exposed skin of your belly. His right hand moves down the front of your thigh, fingers curled so his nails scratch lightly against your jeans. (You regret dearly not wearing your skirt, his hands are soft and would make you so wet touching your bare leg). you grind harder against his cock, its fully erect now in his trousers, he knows you like it now so he becomes a little more forcefull, using the hand around your front to pull you onto him, you can feel the full shape of it now. His hand on your thigh slides back up, but not to your leg, he slides it slowly, so slowly up between your legs, cups the front of your genes with his hand. You gasp and move your left hand round behind you, stroking his errection through his trousers. Your right lifts up over your shoulder, behind his head. you throw your head back and pull him into your neck. With his hand between your legs he strokes with his middle and ring finger. Both your and his hips are grinding hard now. His hand on your belly reaches right up, traces the underside of your bra with the very tips of his fingers then claws down. You gasp again, he laughs slightly and kisses your neck. That hand then takes the one you are touching his cock with, and slides it into his boxers. you squeeze his cock, and circle the head with your thumb. You whisper, voice shaky "I’m so wet. You could slide inside so easily". He calmly replies, "I prefer your mouth". With that your knees weaken. He nibbles your ear lobe and whispers, "my name is Sir, and you’re coming back to my flat, I’ve not had my cock kissed for too long"

He turns you around, looks into your half closed eyes, then down to your mouth, slightly open, breathing heavy. his eyes wander down to your tits, he runs his finger down your cleavage, then up, up your neck, strokes your bottom lip, slides his hand round the back of your head and pulls you in to kiss you, softly, gently, warm, his lips are soft, his tongue parts your lips so easily. It could do anything to you so easily and you know he knows it........
"You like to beg don’t you, beg for cock?"
"Ye...yes...yes sir!"
"Beg me?"
"I will do anything sir. ill kneel, ill bend over, I’ll show you my tits, please, I want you to see my tits, i want to suck your cock, i wa..."
He kisses you again
"Most girls beg to suck my cock eventually, after i lick them, tie them up, but I you. You’re begging already. You’re a good slut, and a good girl"
"Thank you sir"
"I think you've earned the right to be fucked me later"
"Thank you sir"
"now go, go the the bathroom. Take of your bra, I want to see your nipples, watch your tits bounce as we walk home"
"Yes sir"
"I want you to feel exposed, you’re coming with me only to pleasure me"
"Yes sir"
"And also, I have a few friends; I think they would quite enjoy sucking your tits while I get ready for you"
"Oh thank you sir, I want my body to be used, I’ll be thinking of you though"
"I know"
He kisses you, this time hands on your ass and says "suck them off too, and don’t stop until they have both came in your mouth, you may not swallow until they have both came, understood?"
"... YES SIR!" you whimper and grin, you are so wet right now you can’t wait to feel how easily he slides into you
"Now go, get ready, we are going to have so much fun" he grins
...
"Oh, thank you sir, I am yours, Sir!"
......
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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/14/2013 11:31:10 PM   
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Well done... you sure your a newbie???

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/15/2013 1:09:11 AM   
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Ye, first try... Which is why there are undoubtedly many grammatical and punctuation errors, I study biology at uni so this could be my first attempt at a coherent piece of literature for many years! :P
Does that mean you like it? xD Iv written a part two, but it gets a lot more graphic so I wanted to know my part one was acceptable before posting :)
xXx

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/15/2013 7:54:30 PM   
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I really enjoyed it. I didn't see very many grammatical or punctuation errors. A missing word or two, but otherwise very well written. I'm curious about part two. Please post it. Or, pm me with it. I would love to read it.

Thanks for sharing.

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/16/2013 12:10:36 AM   
namelessphill


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Thanks, 'm Kinda nervous about part two so ill send it via message :)

Also, Do you know of any amateur writing websites I could post it to?

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/25/2013 9:14:04 PM   
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quote:

ORIGINAL: namelessphill


Also, Do you know of any amateur writing websites I could post it to?



Literotica.com

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/26/2013 7:42:25 AM   
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Great job! ....2 other places you can check out to post would be word press (you have to create a blog there) and if you want to format your story out - smashwords.com

here is an example of word press - http://pleasurefultouch.wordpress.com/

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RE: First try at erotic fiction! Go easy on me i'm new ... - 1/30/2013 3:46:40 PM   
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I'm coming home from being on a extended business trip. Your at your desk writing Christmas letters. The fireplace is roaring. The room is hot. It's snowing outside, making the world beautiful with the pure white snow.. Your expecting me to be home any minute.. Your dressed in my favorite blue silky robe, wearing nothing underneath.. Your feeling so sexy, relaxed due to a few glasses of red Chardonnay wine. Restless with anticipation for your man to come home. Your moist, eager to taste me. And filled with desire to please me. from knowing what is about to happen to your hungry pussy. It's been 10 long days and nights since he has been inside you... You him now...



I know what is on my mind. I'm getting restless as I get closer to you.. I see you, you hear me come in, but your pretend not to notice me, teasing me. I walk up behind you. Putting my hands on your shoulders, sliding under and cupping your breast feeling the softness of your delicate skin. I'm kissing your neck slightly. Taking in your sweet perfumed scent. I'm next to your left ear lobe kissing, sucking. Pausing for brief moment at the back of your neck. Gently kissing, watching the little hairs stand up with anticipation. Making my way to your right your neck line, teasing you. I then give you the first bite of the evening.



As I'm gently biting you. I playing and pinching your hard swollen erect nipples. Hearing you sigh oh so softly. Lips wet, ready for our first kiss. I stand you up. Your back is to me. I'm pressing my ever growing tool against your ass. Feeling you push up against me. I quickly spin you around grabbing your hands above your head pushing you up against the wall. You are totally under my control. Wanting, willing me to have my way with you. As I place my lips on yours. Your tongue meets mine. Hungry for more. I let your robe fall to the ground. Your body is heaving, wanting all of my 9 inches of manhood inside you. I push you up against the wall. I grab one leg up around my waist. I enter you slowly and softly. Watching your eyes roll back in sheer excitement. You cry out softly moaning as I stretch out your pussy with my hard dick. You bite me hard On my neck. As pull in and out of you. Your juices running down our legs.



Legs weak with excitement, unable to stand any more. I pick you up and carry you to our bed.. I lay you down. Your eyes looking deeply into mine. I slowly climb up inside your parted legs.. Your mine, my dick is so hard, ready to fill that hungry pussy. I tease you just for a moment rubbing my head on your swollen clit. I see your moistness dripping out. No need for lube.. You are ready to be pounded by your man... I enter you so slowly, inch by inch until our pubic mound touches. I stop, your eyes are gone, rolled somewhere inside.. I pull out, almost all the way.. Back in quickly, out so slowly.. I pick up my pace.. In and out , over and over, faster and faster. Breaths getting deeper, moaning getting louder. The electricity between us energizes our desires for each other. I'm pounding you has fast and as hard as I can. Your taking everything I give you... No backing down now.. Your nails digging in my back, I'm biting the hell out of your breasts. Leaving marks to remember this night for days. I fell the cum starting to rise inside me. I pump harder, faster. Your can feel my hot cock growing inside your pussy. Knowing I'm so close to coming... More, more I giving you all of me.. My eyes roll back, my body trembles, I'm exploding my cum deep inside you.... Our bodies pulsating, twitching from a pure release of desire, love and affection towards each other...



I'm spent, catching my breath, my heart ready to explode. My woman just fucked the hell out of me. And I fucked the hell out her.. She has one last surprise for me. I should be use to it by now. It's something she loves doing to her man. She takes my semi erect cock into her hands. She places the head against her lips. The her tongue licks up the last bit of cum oozing out the end of my dick. Tasting and milking my sweet man juice... Yes, my woman is a freak. But I want her again and again...

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