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MisPandora -> RE: Profile review please (12/8/2006 6:38:38 AM)
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Random observations and quick reactions:
"Please do not be presumptuous."
Don't tell me to be anything. 'Please' doesn't soften it.
"willing to locate"
That'd be RElocate. And where? Somewhere else in CN? The US? Guam? No restrictions?
The lower case i thing is really freaking annoying, especially when later in the document you jump back and forth between lc and caps.
*Good list of skills*
"i see myself as an administrative assistant and a facilitator for my mistress' needs,"
It reads like majordomo to me.
Spell check, and edit yourself for formatting errors. You've got a few words spelled wrong. There are a few words that run together that should be spaced, and another few lines that should not be separated with punctuation, etc. They weren't bad enough to make me chuckle, but for someone wanting to be an admin asst to someone else, they'd be enough to knock you down a rung or three of consideration to a candidate who had their i's dotted and their t's crossed.
Note: By the time I got to the end, I felt barraged with a bunch of lines drawn in the sand, demands or whathaveyou, and wanted to stop reading, and the word that was on the tip of my tongue was "obsessive". The red text was unnecessary. If you have health concerns, there's a more sensitive way to say that you need to be in an allergen-free environment. You can also say that you "have a preference for" something because of health concerns....and stop with the repeating over and over and over again about "deal breakers."
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