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Poem: Hold To Me - 4/11/2005 6:59:24 PM

FangsNfeet

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I found you fallen
Stuck on routines and meaningless affection
Yet still dreaming and wanting to fly.
You had your heart of love and wings of imagination
But no one to hold and show you the edge
On your final days of dispair ready to give up
I found you in the dark hearing your last whisper for help

Never remembering flight
Jumping trying to get off the ground
Pouting, whining, and squirming to be free
Reaching for the sky you yearned for so much
Seeing you with arms open and breast of comfort
But nobody would take you high
Then my hand stretched out to you

Breath, now you can cry tears of joy
I have you in my caring arms
To show you the edge and have you fly
Acting on passion, pleasure, and fantasy
Growing with challenge, devotion, and love
I share with you a precious trust
That bondage and pain will set you free

To think it was your submission and my dominance that freed you
My cage being the biggest world for you to ever explore
My blindfold lets you see
My whips cause you to sing
My chains allow you to fly
With my grip on you we shall soar
For you are an angel and I your keeper

Hold to me my beloved pet

< Message edited by FangsNfeet -- 4/12/2005 4:53:51 PM >

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/11/2005 7:57:07 PM

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wonderful, heartfelt, emotional but then I'm more than a little biased

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/11/2005 9:53:00 PM

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Nice. I like the emotion it portrays. I found a couple of mistakes though:

--second word, third line, second strophe, you have 'whinning' It should be 'whining'

--third line, fourth strophe, 'blind fold' should be one word: 'blindfold'

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/12/2005 6:01:08 AM

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An excellant piece and quite well expressed. The tale of a true relationship which I thank you for sharing, My Brother.

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/12/2005 7:06:44 AM

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Beautiful! Thanks for sharing!

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/12/2005 9:37:24 AM

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applause to you. FINALLY!!!!! you see what it is that lays deep
beneath the surface of you FangsNfeet. Congrats FangsNfeet's Pet you have
opened up his heart in a way no one else has ever been able to. I am
definately proud to know you FangsNfeet's Pet. FangsNfeet you finally
have reached a point now that I and others as well can truly glimpse your
soul. Black or not? I am thinking its not as black as you thought it
was.

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RE: Poem: Hold To Me - 4/15/2005 6:23:49 PM

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I'm glad all of you where able to enjoy my poem that was inspired by my pet. My heart and soul where truely in it and I will be posting again soon.

Sincerly,

FnF

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