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BitaTruble -> RE: Speech (5/12/2006 12:46:18 PM)
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One thing that struck me in the third presentation was that, in reading it, it reads like a story, created by an external viewer, looking out on a scene and describing it. In many ways, effective use of 3rd person speech is a form of graceful narration of one's life. The focus drifts from the narrator, and settles on where the narrator's focus lands. If, in the case of service-life, the focus is on the owner/guide, the language describing and relating to that life become owner-focused as well.
To a point, I agree with this, but in the examples given, I think a lot of the 'meaning' was lost in an effort to create clinically accurate 3rd person speech.
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"Master and I went to the bondage party last night. It was great fun! He warmed me up with a flogger, but then our session turned to the whip. I love the whip! He knows how much I like it and decided to tease me for a while first. In the end, we had a great scene. Then we spent some casual time with another couple we're great friends with. I felt warm and glowy the whole time they were talking and didn't really hear much of the conversation. The night ended with me falling asleep in Master's arms." quote:
Written in 3rd speak with the intent to take focus off the speaker (and to add emphasis to Master):
"Master took his His slave to the bondage party last night. He had great fun. He warmed his slave up with a flogger, but then His session turned to the whip. His girl loves the whip. He knows how much she likes it and decided to tease her for a while first. In the end, He had a great scene. Then He spent some casual time with another couple He's great friends with. His slave felt warm and glowy the whole time others were talking and didn't really hear much of the conversation. The night ended with Master holding His slave in His arms while she fell asleep." To me, these two paragraphs convey two very different accounts of the same night. The one in third person paints an entirely different picture from what really took place. I don't think that's the intention of third person speech. It seems to me that while the focus of the paragraph has been taken off the slave, it's been done at the expense of an accurate accounting of what took place. It just rings false to me. What a bondage party last night! Such great fun! Master decided to warm up with floggers which turned into markings with whips (Woot!) and, of course, there was His requisite teasing for some added enjoyment! He is soooo good at what He does. Ah, such feelings invoked ... so warm and glowy. To be part of such an incredible scene is just WOW! Afterwards, there was time spent with another couple, friends for quite a long while actually. The endorphins from the session could not be easily shaken. So much so, in fact, that only snatches of conversation between Master and the other couple were heard as things such as hearing and understanding became low priorities overwhelmed by the atmosphere He created during the scene.. but that flight, the warmth and peace from enduring it allowed for a deep and satisfying sleep in the arms of Master at the end of the night. To me, the above account accurately portrays what really took place without putting undue focus on the slave. I think a Master who has a standing order of such is more interested in effort and results to convey the meaning of what's happening, rather than taking something so wonderful as the evening described and turning into a clinical exercise of 3rd person speech. I mean, is the purpose of third person speech meant to be an exercise in it's use.. or an exercise in how to properly convey thoughts and ideas without a focus on self? The latter seems to make more sense than the former. Just a thought. Celeste
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