You are absolutely right. A very terrible message. To pre-write a message before you have even met someone is about the worst idea you can come up with.
Here is a clue, women DO NOT LIKE canned messages. They want to know that you are interested in them as a person. You message says nothing as to why you are interested in the person. What about their profile attracted you to them? What about their profile interested you? What about their profile makes you think the two of you have something in common to share.
BDSM is no different than courting a vanilla woman. Women want to be courted. So forget pre-written messages and go interact with a real person.
It may be a terrible message, but it was not pre-written. You are assuming, but you are new to the thread. Say it again and I will not be polite about it.
What about the profile? The "typical day". The emphasis on oral, watersports and sadism that made me think we were very compatible. Her skill for intellectual discourse. Wanting autonomy. I don't want a mindless slave who is rarely smarter than me. I want to learn from my partner. I want to admire her mind. Her drive to become educated was attractive to me.
Here are the facts:
You asked for peoples input
People gave you the input your message was terrible
You attacked the people whom you asked for input after they told you the message was terrible
If you do not like the answer, do not ask the question
You can either choose to learn from the input you had asked for or you can continue to act like to 5 years old child who did not get his way. The choice is yours.
Okay, 5 year old temper tantrum path it is. Good luck with that. As you have already heard from EVERYONE here, women do not like that. Have fun with your loneliness.
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